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Wonderful. Loved it completely. Can't wait for more. The only continous problems within this is the single-sentence lines and the other few things that Alicat went over. I better not ...

Sounds intresting. Might get it out of the library (Yay! I live near it). The "assigned" part sounds a bit like The City of Ember. I thought it was related ...

Wonderful poem. You actually described dancing in a way I've never seen it (though I don't see dancing much, especially myself :wink:). Favorite part: The story alive with movement and ...

Someone's going to behead you for no caps (especially the eye) and the puncuation. :wink: Don't worry, there's always a first time. Watch out, the exicutioner might come early! Here, ...

Hilarious. Loved it. (do you know how long it took me to remember we had portfolios so I could find this poem? :shock: ) It sounds so right. *prints it ...

Really good. Since the other first comers caught all those little mistakes, guess I have to comment and try to help you out. This prologue makes me intrested real badly ...

I like it. The names aren't that bad, though. At least for me. Can't wait for more. Yeah, it seems like you rushed through this. Why don't you get Microsoft ...

For Prologue: I don't have time to finish the review, so I'll do up to the prologue. I like how you write. I like the prologue. Nice vocabulary, by the ...